Poem using poetic techniques- Lost

The fire in the backyard, the fairy lights around, there is no place more peaceful.

It is dark, nearly midnight, but the town is still thriving. The New Year’s Eve fireworks, the flickering orange light of the fire.

The gentle strumming the guitar, the once annoying, but now peaceful hum of the cicadas. The laughter of my friends, the waves crashing to the shore.

Wide- eyed and alive, we are lost in time. We walk down the road, we feel safe and comfortable, but wild and free.

Can we stay here forever? Will we ever calm down, feel tired, ever?

The good, playful vibes, the feeling that you can do anything, with no stresses in the world. The dread of going home. I don’t want to leave.

Lost In time, never sleeping,

Lost in time,

Lost.

2 thoughts on “Poem using poetic techniques- Lost

  1. phoebe2014 says:

    Hi Heidi
    Nice poem! I like how at the end you made the lines shorter. I like how you had the questions about it. I guess you maybe could put some figurative language into it as well.
    Good job
    Phoebe

  2. lilly2014 says:

    Hi Heidi
    I really liked the structure you used. It was very interesting and I liked how you built up the ending.
    Keep it up
    Lilly
    🙂

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